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Lex Wallace [Human Hunter]
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Player: Solinax

Character Full Name: Lex Wallace

Character In-Game Name: Lex

Nickname(s): Pyro; Merc

Association(s): N/A

Race: Human

Class: Hunter

Skills and Abilities: Lex is really skilled in the art of using a gun. His skills and incredibly sharp eye, allow him to make really accurate shots at long distances. He is also a really good tracker and knows a thing or two about first aid.

Age: 33

Sex: Male

Hair: Black, tied back on a ponytail.

Eyes: Green

Weight: 193 lbs / 87 kg.

Height: 6'1 ft. / 187 cm

Scale: 1.02

Usual Garments/Armor: He usually walks around with a brown leather attire, that’s more practical in the wilderness and in combat. Pouches hang from his belt, as well as a leather holster on his right thigh, with a revolver in it. His rifle is usually hanging on a belt from his shoulder. He’ll also be seen with a wide-rimmed had that protects his face from the sun. In large towns he’d most likely be seen wearing a classy suit from expensive fabrics.

Other: He’s got tattoos on his arms and chest. He smells like tobacco, due to the fact that he smokes.

Alignment: Neutral Good

Personality: Lex is usually calm and cautious. He would always think over a situation before acting. He would seem quite friendly and open-minded at first sight, usually seen chatting with a lot of people, wanting to be the center of attention. He's quite a joker and known for his constant pick-up attempts. He would pretty much hit on every humanoid female that catches his eye. He also has his pet peeves , so he can easily be infuriated with the right choice of words.

History: Lex was born in Stormwind. His father was an ignoble thug and his mother was a barmaid in a tavern. When Lex was three years old the family moved to Lordaeron, fleeing from the orcish attack on their previous home.

The boy quickly found new friends and began wandering the streets of his new home, basically taking care of himself at the age of 8. He mostly used to hang out with a boy his age. The two became close friends and spent a lot of time running around the forests and playing.

Time passed as Lex grew up. When he turned fifteen his first sister was born so Lex had to spend more time at home, helping his mother. He then began studying strategy and tactics. He began reading stories of great battles and victories and also, started to train shooting a gun. Lex and his friend, Jake, started hunting together, wandering around the taverns late at night and getting into trouble. All of the above things typical for boys their age.

When Lex turned seventeen he was already in trouble with the local authorities due to a really bad bar fight that he caused. His parents were fined and Lex’s father sent him in the army as a punishment as soon as the young Wallace turned eighteen. He got assigned as a scout, something Lex was good in due to the time spent in the forest and learning tactics.

Now twenty years old, Lex was already finished with his training. His father got sent to prison and his mother was left to take care of Lex’s sister.

Lex was stationed in a special task force during the third war. The weapon of his choice - A gun. He began doing various tasks for the Lordaeron army, and later on he began doing tasks for the Stormwind army. He moved to Stormwind shortly before Lordaeron was overtaken by the scourge. His family remained there. Lex was positive that they are both dead, but later on he understands that his mother and sister managed to flee and survive. Sadly they got killed by pirates while trying to sail to Stormwind. Lex knew that there was nothing he can do to save both his mother and sister and neither his hometown so he ignored the memory, moving on with his life.

During his service in the Stormwind unit Lex was given the opportunity to work with keen edge gnomish and goblin technology. Lex spent eight years of his life working as a sniper for that squad.

One day they were sent on a task to take down a large organization of slavers and marauders. During that operation all of Lex’s squad-mates died. Only he managed to escape and report what happened to his commanding officer. By that time he was 25 years old.

A week later Lex left the army, due to the fact that the operation against the people who killed his friends was closed. He formed his own task force and went after the slavers, seeking vengeance.

After completely destroying the organization, Lex and his new squad continued acting like mercenaries until the organization broke apart. Lex was already 33 by that time. He finally decided to lay off the fighting and live his life. But it doesn’t seem to happen that easy…Does it? …
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19.08.1969 - 15.03.2011
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Could you give this a once-over for small mistakes? Stuff like the "He" on the end of your hair section, the two "History:"s, and the erratic spacing you have in some parts. Aside from those, it's completely fine - I'd like to see some expansion on his personality, though.
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Will do. I must have missed all those mistakes. Didn't even quite read it through.

Edits have been made!
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19.08.1969 - 15.03.2011
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You have his class listed as "warrior." Just a head's up!
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That was because I was thinking of slapping another set I had in mind. Buut then I decided to just roll with hunter. I didn't think that it would be such a problem. Will fix it, thanks for the heads up.
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19.08.1969 - 15.03.2011
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First off, we need to see a scale section underneath the height section. At 6'1", he'd be around 1.01 or 1.02 in terms of scale.

Quote:Age: 33
Quote:When Lex was five years old the family moved to Lordaeron, fleeing from the orcish attack on their previous home.

At the age of 33, that would mean that Stormwind would have fallen to the Orcs at the age of 3, not 5.

Quote:He formed his own task force and went after the slavers, seeking vengeance.
Quote:After completely destroying the organization, Lex and his new squad continued acting like mercenaries until the organization broke apart.

So they weren't mercenaries when Lex first put the squad together? If they weren't, he would have had to get permission from an authority who is higher up in the army to form that squad, and you should probably clarify that, since this has to do with your character having led his own squad for a while.

The rest of this is minor stuff, like spelling, sentence structure, and other issues. I've put it in the spoiler:

Spoiler:

Quote:A week later Lex left the army, due to the fact that the operation against the people killed his friends was closed.

I'm finding this sentence difficult to follow and comprehend. It might just be because it would clarify things to say 'against the people who killed his friends' rather than 'against the people killed'

Quote:Pouches hang from his belt, aswell as a leather holster on his right thigh, with a revolver in it.

aswell -> as well

Quote:Lex knew that there was nothin he can do to save both his mother and sister and neither his hometown so he ignored the memory, moving on wih his life.

nothin -> nothing and wih -> with

Quote:Alignment:(Optional.) Neutral Good

Delete the '(Optional.)' here.

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(11-01-2013, 12:52 PM)Geoni Wrote: So they weren't mercenaries when Lex first put the squad together? If they weren't, he would have had to get permission from an authority who is higher up in the army to form that squad, and you should probably clarify that, since this has to do with your character having led his own squad for a while.

They were. What I meant was that at first they were working for the alliance. After that they started doing all kinds of mercenary work, travelling around the world.

Also.. Edits have been made.
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19.08.1969 - 15.03.2011
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Approved!

Wikified!
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