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Special [Human] Kristoff Oberwald Aegilmar [Knight-Champion]
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Player: Altaine

Character Full Name: Kristoff Oberwald Aegilmar

Character In-Game Name: Kristoff

Association(s): House of Nobles, Stormwind Army (Not Ulrach's) The Alliance

Race: Human

Class: Warrior

Skills and Abilities: Bearing the rank of Knight-Champion.

Age: 50

Sex: Male

Hair: Black, Graying

Eyes: Blue-green

Weight: 216 lbs

Height: 5'11''

Usual Garments/Armor: Kristoff Aegilmar is usually seen in either a casual civilian-wear, or his full plate armor he favors the most from his wardrobe. He has a formal wear but he dislikes it strongly and only wears it during grand events such as a meeting or ball or etc.

In dress, Kristoff is seldom seen without his plate armor. The plate armor consists of his shoulder pads, vest, gloves, and boots. Kristoff's pauldrons are a heavily condensed piece of metal made specifically to rise and fall in small divets to protect his lower facial and shoulder area. Apart from the hunk of metal on his shoulders, his vest contains a chain mail gorget that coats his neck in a protective layer of chain and padding whilst providing cushion for the visor he wears with pride -- that cotains no plume.

Alignment: Neutral Good

Personality: Kristoff is a quiet man who would rather think before he acts; as many a younger men can learn consequences in many different fashions. He could be described as many things, but above all he is wise and just. Around the peasantry and rest of the Kingdom, he is courteous and friendly to all as a province can only run on those willing to serve their Lords and Ladies.

History:
Kristoff Aegilmar was born to Lord Albert Aegilmar, the Baron of the Eastridge Mountains and southern Cairn Lake and Lady Sandria Cleopathra, a noblewoman of goodly repute from Redridge. His upbringing was that of any typical nobleman's son of the realm in the age of peace before the Orcish Wars.

The birth of Kristoff Aegilmar to his noble parents was a momentous occasion in the Principality of Eastridge, celebrated throughout the hold - both for the birth of a healthy male heir and the survival of Lady Sandria. He was Blessed by the court priests and wizards, and spoilt by house-maidens, but Kristoff hardly saw his mother as it was hard life living in the Eastvale Mountains-- Now named Eastridge. Kristoff's youth was rife with consequence and discipline.

From Lady Sandria, Kristoff learned-- from when he could spend time with his mother -- the pure and unconditional love of a doting mother. Her kindness and gentle heart softened the impact that his father's teachings would bear, providing balance for the young boy as he found his way in the world. His father was a strong disciplinarian, imparting on his son the values of duty and honor - setting him on the path of military service. Almost always on business outside of Eastridge among the king's court, he would return bearing gifts for his son from the far reaches of the kingdom. If ever Kristoff loved his mother, he most surely respected his father for his accomplishments, bearing, and resolve as a leader.

When Kristoff was of age to finally wield a sword, he was squired to Sir Griff Roltheim, the foremost knight of the Eastridge Armsmen. Sir Roltheim favored unforgiving, swift discipline much in the same style as Kristoff's father, and it was under the heavy clout of his hand Kristoff learned the ways of the sword. Sir Roltheim was known to have beat his students with an oaken quarterstaff when they failed to meet his expectations. Lady Sandria offered much protest to this tactic when it was employed upon Kristoff, but Lord Albert refused to let his son escape the discipline known of the Aegilmar bloodline.

Sir Griff was a role model to the young Kristoff, as many nights he'd stay awake and gaze across the Hold's balcony, dreaming of the days when he must be called upon to protect his keep with a plated fist and the discipline of a drillmaster. Many nights of the week would Kristoff escape far into the Hold's library to study upon formations and grand kingdom legacies to impress his father and his teacher, for that one day he will be called to take his Father's place as Baron.

As all good times must end, the bad ones must rise. Despite all efforts to save it, the Kingdom of Azeroth was shattered by the tide of the Orcish Horde - leaving Lord Albert and Lady Sandria dead and the title of a ruined land in Kristoff's name. Escaping to Lordaeron amongst a numbered few of Stormwind's peerage, a young Baron Kristoff was faced with leading his remaining subjects.

When the Second War had come, Kristoff received a message from Stormwind of the oncoming invasion of a second Orcish Horde and the summons to marshal his forces for war. Kristoff was rather dumbfounded, having no idea that such a force was now crashing through the Eastern Kingdoms again. As one of the most (unwillingly) experienced in combat against the orcs, Earl Kristoff was thrust into the front lines of the Alliance of Lordaeron's war against the Horde. It was in the fires of these battlefields that Kristoff rose as a promising young Knight.

During the celebrations of the Alliance victory and the liberation of Stormwind, Earl Kristoff was offered many hands in marriage as Houses from Westridge and Goldshire attempted to liberate the two in an Alliance, and many hands were shooed away from Baron Kristoff as he did not want to marry a woman who would not love back as much as he would unto her.

After the exodus to Lordaeron ended, and the rebuilding of Stormwind finished, Earl Kristoff lead his people back to Stormwind to come and reclaim his hold in the Eastvale mountains and site. He assisted in any way possible towards the House of Nobles in Stormwind to help the recovery.

During the small period of peace between the Second and aftermath of the Orcish Wars, Earl Kristoff began to raise horses and further the production of the logging camp, spreading his influence north to the Cairn Lake, but only to a part of the shore as the county wasn't permitted such a large state.

Earl Kristoff soon found himself embroiled with the reconstruction of the Kingdom of Stormwind and the politics that such entailed. When the Dark Portal reopened, Lord Kristoff marched alongside the Sons of Lothar in the First Alliance Expedition to Draenor. However, Lord Kristoff refused to deploy across the portal into an unknown world. It was a cowardly act in the eyes of many, but Earl Kristoff did not want his own Armsmen of Eastridge forced into another war that would employ much bloodshed and loss again.

Afterwards, he returned home with his armsmen and cavaliers back to Eastridge. He kept an ever-vigilant watch and strove for enforcing peace and law throughout his land as the final blocks were being placed upon Stormwind. Some say that Earl Kristoff even ventured occasionally with local hunters to quell the numbers of beasts that threatened the many laborers of the land.

For months, not a word was heard from the Earl. The workings of Eastvale slowly ground to a halt. As aging veterans of the Orcish Wars passed on, the leadership of the Eastridge's armsmen and cavaliers crumbled. Eastridge, one of Stormwind's famous training camps for armsmen and lumber. No matter the case, Earl Kristoff remained cloistered in his thoughts and studies within Eastridge Hold for several years after the Third War.

It was during these years that Earl Kristoff took a piqued interest in archaeology and human history. As most of Stormwind's records had perished in the Orcish Wars, and with the loss of the great libraries of Lordaeron, there was much work to be done in refilling Azeroth's bookshelves. Between his bouts of depression, Kristoff wrote several scholarly volumes on the Arathorian Empire and Kingdom of Azeroth from what scraps he could salvage from the remains of the Library of Westbrook and Stormwind.

With the recent rise of the Destroyer, Earl Kristoff expects only the worst to come from his death and destruction upon the land, and furthers the production of Armsman and Archers for the Kingdom.
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Overall a very good profile! Good work! Still, there's a few concerns I'd like to point out;

Altaine Wrote:Kristoff Aegilmar was born to Lord Albert Aegilmar, the Baron of the Eastvale Mountains and southern Cairn Lake and Lady Sandria Cleopathra, a noblewoman of goodly repute from Redridge. His upbringing was that of any typical nobleman's son of the realm in the age of peace before the Orcish Wars.

If we separate the Eastvale Mountains from the in-game region (Eastvale Logging Camp), then we can reach an agreement. If we imagine that WoW geography is very sparsely represented in the game itself, and consider the fact that the width of that area may be a lot larger, owning all the land from Eastvale to southern Stone Cairn Lake is owning roughly an eight of the entire Elwynn region. In other words, that's a lot of land.

Altaine Wrote:When the Second War had come, it was Kristoff who warned the House of Wyrnn of the oncoming invasion of a second Orcish Horde through the Eastern Mountains and reporting of several warbands charging north,

First off, why warn House Wrynn when at the time, there was only Varian - who was only a child? Second, why is he the one warning House Wrynn instead of a superior officer (who isn't a Lore character)?

Altaine Wrote:In the push south, he was a key leader in several Alliance victories in Khaz Modan and Azeroth.

The impression I get is that he was a major field commander. I wouldn't deny you a solid contribution to the war effort, but to tell you the truth, being a "key leader" puts you up there with Lothar and Uther the Lightbringer. Obviously, having lead parts of Stormwind's army in battle is certainly fine, but being the commander is perhaps a bit too much.

Altaine Wrote:Earl Kristoff lead his people back to Stormwind and employed many of the former Mason's Guild to come and rebuild his hold in the Eastvale mountains and site. He later cursed himself for not employing all -- for it would have been a grand idea to keep the Defias from rebelling later in due time. [. . .]

[. . .] Earl Kristoff soon found himself embroiled with the reconstruction of the Kingdom of Stormwind and the politics that such entailed. When the Dark Portal reopened, Lord Kristoff marched alongside the Sons of Lothar in the First Alliance Expedition to Draenor.

Unfortunately, the invasion of Draenor occurred in Year 8. The Defias rebellion occurred in Year 14. There's not much he could've done to prevent the House of Nobles from cheating them for six years - and I don't think he could've afforded to employ the whole guild, as it took the whole Stormwind House of Nobles to afford employing them to rebuild the city. :p

Altaine Wrote:(As Eastvale was hurt the most in the Orcish Tide.)

Minor note; There's nothing to imply this in the Lore. During the Second War the kingdom of Azeroth was hardly under any pressure at all while the Horde was busy up north in Khaz Modan and Lordaeron.

Altaine Wrote:In later times, some claimed that Lady Katrana Prestor's magic had corrupted the Baron - amplifying his sorrow to cripple Eastvale, one of Stormwind's famous training camps for armsmen and lumber.

While people say a lot of foolish things, I don't really see why this matters in the profile. If anything, it implies that Lady Katrana should have a reason to curse him - which I frankly don't believe she would. Onyxia was more concerned with controlling the Regent and Stormwind itself - not the other areas of Stormwind, which is why they always had troubles with defense and such.

Altaine Wrote:The outbreak of the Undead Scourge in Lordaeron and Quel'Thalas prompted Stormwind to send aid - with Baron Kristoff as one of the regimental commanders.

Firstly, Stormwind took no part in the Third War. Secondly, I wonder if you could specify in the title of the thread (and preferably in the Skills and Abilities!) what sort of authority you are applying for. If it is military rank in addition to nobility, we'd like to know where in the hierarchy you wish to be!

As a final note, we can discuss any individual concern more closely if you feel that I've misinterpreted what you've been trying to say or if you need help editing! :)
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Quote:If we seperate the Eastvale Mountains from the in-game region (Eastvale Logging Camp) then we can reach an agreement.

I realize this, and as It does seem like a huge land ownership, from nobility ownership in lore...

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Their properties are pretty huge, but yes, Eastvale would be too big. So I'll cut down the province as small as the little blotch of land there.

As with the House of Wrynn issue, I'll resolve it to instead warn a local General and/or rally an army to come to aide and defense.

@Rowgen, I didn't mean 'super-awesome-ultra-mega-amazing-leader', I mean in the smaller scale battles he won many decisive victories that helped the entire army as a whole, but he didn't lead hundreds of thousands of men, possibly only a brigade (60,000) at most. The only 'General' he'd be able to become is a Field Marshal.

Also, I didn't mean the entire Mason's Guild, I understand that the entire House had to contribute in spending so much coin. But he attempted to talk one or two men out of the planned rebellion .. but not like:

"COME, AND GROW FAT OFF OF MY FILLED COFFERS!"
-tosses coin in the air- (xD)

It was more like: he needed his hold recreated, and fast. He knew a few mason-men left Stormwind in outrage due to the Nobles's choices and he tried to quickly think on taking out multiple problems with one.

AndI'll also take out the (As Eastvale was hurt the most in the Orcish Tide.).

As for Lady Katrana/Onyxia, I'll take her magic-amplifying idea out and instead put in that a probable cause for his sorrow was that how wolves and bears freely roamed about Eastvale and killed off many subjects of the realm.

Also, I need to think further on the Third War before I have a good response. /nod

@Rowgen Finally, I don't see a reason to put any special abilities or skills in his profile. I put it in the title but besides having leadership and having the mature understanding of swordsmanship, there's not a reason to put anything down.
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On the matter of SUPAH-LEADAH; That sounds alright with me - don't worry. I know you're not aiming for being the absolute best leader of all time, I'm just pointing out how I read it.

As for your other edits, they seem reasonable to me! Field marshal is the highest rank above general, though!

While we're mentioning it; what I meant was that it wasn't quite clear in the profile what sort of authority you wanted! Thus, adding for instance [Lord][Rank] in the title or specifying his power in Skills could shed some light on it. :)
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I would not want a player saying they own a part of Eastvale, or a part of Goldshire, or a part of any named town. Saying you own land near Eastvale. Sure. Saying you own a part of Eastvale? No.
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What has Eastvale done besides lumber-mills, archers, and cavaliers? It's not like I was saying that Eastvale was the sole purpose of x because of y or that my character is x because y. I mean, what is the harm of claiming part of Eastvale for IC reasons/purposes in a noble? I didn't get out of hand and ridiculous with the character. It's on the map, there's no harm being impelmented.
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The point is, it's still a lore town and we would rather not have players claiming to own part of a lore town, as it gives them power over the NPCs that are there.
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Would I be able to mold it so instead of actually owning Eastvale Logging Camp he contributed to the large amounts of lumber they gathered in every month?
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Contribute to Eastvale, sure. You just can't own the town.
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Updated some things, changed the name to Eastridge, and no longer Eastvale. Shortened the province of Eastridge by a few, and now it's rightfully away from the logging camp and such.

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Extended the province into the mountains, @Rowgen cut off the Third War stuff, and modified his depression-problem.

P.S. I chose Field-Marshal, because Lord Marshal leads a lot more men than a Field Marshal and I'd feel uncomfortable leading 100,000+ men.
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Field Marshal is a -very- high rank, and seeing as how you include Stormwind Army under association, did you want to have your character recognized as a current Field Marshal/get the rank for your character? If yes, I'd like to ask you to give him a lower rank, as Field Marshal is the second highest PvP rank you can get as an Alliance player.
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@Mathias Would Knight-Champion be high enough to lead a regiment (possibly multiples) but not -too- grand and large?
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It would be.
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Knight-Champion, then. :D
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Just need you to make the edits in the profile, then. There is still the claim to Eastvale in there, the odd hiring of "former" Mason's Guild members before Stormwind was complete, as well as putting Stormwind's reconstruction ahead of the Beyond the Dark Portal campaign, and warning House Wrynn whose only member would be Varian Wrynn (as far as know) or Anduin Lothar, who would act in place of the young Wrynn.
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